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Randall Jarrell, "The Death of the Ball Turret Gunner"

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Randall Jarrell, "The Death of the Ball Turret Gunner"

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That hits HARD.
Coelacanth
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The poem as a whole felt a little so-so to me, but that last line hits like a truck.
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  Agreed. Makes me wonder if that might’ve been the intention of the opening. The poem is held up by the shock of the last line.
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    Definitely smacks of a poem being engineered backwards from the conception of that one line, yes.

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