• Coelacanth
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    3 days ago

    The poem as a whole felt a little so-so to me, but that last line hits like a truck.

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      3 days ago

      Agreed. Makes me wonder if that might’ve been the intention of the opening. The poem is held up by the shock of the last line.

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        Definitely smacks of a poem being engineered backwards from the conception of that one line, yes.